Peer Review — Science and Art

I liked the way you started off your introduction by asking us questions. Your thesis was very strong and clear. I really like how you started off your first paragraph relating your experience here at UNE with art and science. It really brought your opinion into the paper and ensured we knew that you were interested in dental hygiene. Your use of quotes was good, you had them in the right spots with good explanations. When introducing the authors, be careful not to be too redundant or not even introduce them at all and just jump right into their quotes. Readers need to know why we can trust the quotes. On your third page, the first paragraph, you left your paragraph with the thought of religion and behavior but then didn’t elaborate any more on them. I suggest that you either elaborate more and tie them in better to your thesis and overall.

Overall I really liked your paper and I thought you made some really good points!